剖析:句中人称代词we 和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为: We can also know society by serving it ourselves.
七. 不间断句子(Run-on Sentences) 什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。 例1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world. 剖析:这个句子包含了两层完整的意思:“There are many ways.” 以及“We get to know the outside world.”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。 改为: There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或: There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world
八. 措词毛病(Troubles in Diction) Diction 是指在特定的句子中如何适当地选用词语的问题,囿于教学时间紧迫,教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲,斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。 例1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution. (农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。) 剖析:显然,考生把obstacles“障碍”,“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断增加的使用)” 应改为“abusive use (滥用)”。 改为: The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.
九. 累赘(Redundancy) 言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如: In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him. 本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句,我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为:In spite of his laziness, I like him. 例1. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need. 剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。 改为: Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.
十. 不连贯(Incoherence) 不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。 例1. The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth. 剖析:The fresh water 与逗号后的it 不连贯。It 与things 在数方面不一致。 改为: Fresh water is the most important thing in the world.
十一. 综合性语言错误(Comprehensive Misusage) 所谓“综合性语言错误”,是指除了上述十种错误以外,还有诸如时态,语态,标点符号,大小写等方面的错误。 例1.Today, Money to everybody is very importance, our’s eat, cloth, live, go etc.
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